October 25th, 2008
Thesis Statements (Group 1)
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Group 1: Kiley, Jimmy W., Frank, and Furb
You will post your thesis statements in the comment section here and then comment on each other’s thesis statements. Please offer very specific advice how your team members could improve their thesis statements.
on October 26th, 2008 at 1:41 pm
In Darfur, its by the way of God that you make it past 25 years old. all the kids are frilled with Sorrow and all the Adults are filled with Pain in Darfur. It seems like if you want to practice peace, then you must pre-pair for war. What is the government and the large economical World Leaders doing about it? When will they take on the responsibility of ending the genocide thatst occuring? When will the alllow the people of Darfur to take a stand and be able to raise their voice?
on October 26th, 2008 at 1:45 pm
In Darfur, its by the way of God that you Make it past 25 years old. In Darfur all the kids are filled with Sorrow and all the Adults are filled with pain. It seems like if you want to practice peace, then you must pre-pair for war. What is the government and the large economical World Leaders doing about it? When will they take on the responsibility of ending the genocide that is occuring? When will they allow the people of Darfur to take a stand and be able to raise their voice?
on October 26th, 2008 at 2:51 pm
Jimmy W
thesis: From nazi Germany to Darfur, evil ran free. All evil can relate is one way or another, from the humans they target, or to the ways they bring terror, and over the years the evil has continued to spread.
on October 26th, 2008 at 7:37 pm
jwstar- Good idea, little choppy, move things around and make it flow better.
smile07- your gonna be able to get a lot out of the questions your asking in the thesis, but you need to fix your grammar/spelling.
on October 26th, 2008 at 7:42 pm
The lives of an adolescent males and females located in Darfur have many different ways of life, culturally, socially, and technologically compared to the lives of adolescent children in America.
on October 26th, 2008 at 8:05 pm
Kiley
Since the start of the crisis in Darfur in 2003 , the United States has failed to cease the genocide and its perpetrators.
on October 26th, 2008 at 8:11 pm
Frank: I like how you ask questions, gets the reader thinking. Good thesis, just go over the spelling and grammar.
Jimmy: Good thesis, I like the comparison between Holocaust/Nazis and genocide/janjaweed.
Furb: Love the comparison to kids in the U.S and kids in Darfur, different subject topic
on October 26th, 2008 at 10:52 pm
Good work, group 1. I have comments for all of you!