July 16th, 2009
Conclusions~Group 2
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Group 2: Anthony, Breanna, & Dante’
Post your two conclusions below by Saturday 5:00 pm. Comment on your group members’ conclusions by Sunday 5:00 pm.
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on July 16th, 2009 at 2:21 pm
Anthony Laureano
Professor Digiorgio
College Reading & Writing
16 July 2009
“Conclusions”
Clearly, my family is very important to me. When I graduate college and get my bachelors degree in Theater performance, I’m going to do my best to help support my family. I want to have kids and inspire them to do their best in life, and I’m going to be there with them every waking moment of their lives and give them what I never had. I also want to be a role model to people around the world, and to show them that no matter where you come from or what you been through in life, there is always a chance to strive for the best. Despite all that my family put me through, I have persevered and want to keep on going somewhere; there is never an end for me.
However, in the world there are many people that been through what I have gone through, but only some would choose my path. Some people would never be able to forget the obstacles they been put through, and they would remain trapped in their situations. Not only do I want to be able to influence Puerto Rican males like me to go to college, I also want them to influence others as well. Despite all the obstacles that my family put me through I’m still very ambitious, and very determined to be the best of the best.
on July 16th, 2009 at 2:27 pm
Dante’ Sprott
Prof. D
English
1 July 2009
Dou you know how I feel? Do you understand where I am coming from? Have you ever been there done that? See while I am a Sprott, while I am still a Longstreet. I still stand! I will continue to stand till I lay down and the only way for me to lie down is when I go to heaven. That’s the only way out from this life I worked hard to start. For I am the rose that grew from concrete, that people couldn’t see happen. The only other question left that is to answer is where do I go after this? I will never be answered.
“Dante’, Dante’, bring it back in. Can you please come up and read your essay? Are you ready?” Professor D asked. She had caught me off guard and as I brought myself back from looking out into the sky outside the classroom window I had to get back to work. I grabbed my paper off my desk and began to walk to the front of the class. “The Rose That Grew from Concrete” I began to read the beginning of my essay.
on July 16th, 2009 at 2:30 pm
Anthony
While they are both good i really like the second one better. Its the conclusion that fits your essay the best and still leave with a bang while the other is a little more off that road
on July 17th, 2009 at 8:43 am
Your conclusions were good, but I think the 1st one is really confusing and not too organized. You should try to organize it more by not addindg so many questions. I know you can do better. In the other hand conclusion #2 is great I love how it starts of as a story and ends up in reality.
on July 17th, 2009 at 10:57 am
Tynisha Wyman
Conclusion #1
Where does a man fit into a woman’s life? How does a woman succeed on her own? Why is being independent important? A man fits in a woman’s life if he wants to. You can’t make a man stay that doesn’t want to be there. A woman would be hurting herself if she even tried. A woman succeeds by realizing that she doesn’t need anybody for anything. She should be confident enough in herself to know that she can make it on her own. Not having that confidence in yourself would just make you depend on others. Independence is important because you have to find out your strengths on your own. You have to be able to know what you want and do it for yourself. I am independent, and nobody can change me or tell me what I can’t do. I learned my independence throughout my whole life. Watching my mother as I grew up taught me to do for myself. Independence is the number one key to success, and I’m on the right path.
Conclusion #2
Imagine opening your eyes to what was supposed to be two parents was only one. Although I was very young I still felt the pain of not having a father around. I still missed him like any child would, but I couldn’t let his absence in my life stop me from achieving my goals. I will forever go on until I feel as though those goals are met. I am still strong and will continue to be for as long as I live. I will not let anybody or anything stop me from being me or come between what I believe in. I am who I am because of who and what I believe in. I believe in my mother and I believe that independence is the key to success.
p.s, the people who are commenting the ending in both are somewhat the same because i want that in which ever one you thinks is best.
on July 18th, 2009 at 2:48 pm
Tynisha
Your conclusions are very similar so its hard for me to really judge they both have the same idea and same setting i would suggest to change it up maybe a little. Other than that it stays on topic and get straight to the point. I like the second one more if u ask my opinion. Good work